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 It is commonly believed that children should be high-achievers in the field they are pursuing, while others think that they should not be forced to strive for excellence. While I agree that the former idea can benefit the kids to a certain extent, it can be detrimental in some cases. 

There exist plausible justifications for encouraging children to attempt to get the highest results in any activities. First and foremost, hard work is always a valuable quality that a child should nurture. By urging them to do their utmost, parents and educators can help them foster studiousness. Better still, when getting great accomplishments by making individual efforts, children can be more self-confident, which is also necessary in their life. 

However, I am of the opinion that when encouragement turns into pressure, children can suffer from serious repercussions. In today’s fast-paced society, an increasing number of parents and teachers are putting students under enormous pressure of becoming top performers in all activities. This tendency can, in the long run, affect children’s mental health. It is scientifically suggested that children who are obliged to get stellar grades at school are more likely to suffer from depression and even commit suicide in some countries such as Korea and America. Worse still, if some of them cannot accomplish the highest scores, those seemingly low achievers can be abusively self-critical. 

In conclusion, for the sake of children themselves, they should be encouraged to flourish at their own pace and abilities. Forcing them to obtain outstanding achievements can be disadvantageous in some cases, leading to mental illnesses and feelings of discouragement in children. 

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